This document contains notes and feedback from drafts of an assignment. It includes teacher, peer, and self-assessments of draft 4 as well as notes on improving close-ups, flashbacks, voiceovers, and investigation papers for the final draft. Suggestions are made to make the overall project shorter and the flashbacks more effective with closer shots.

1. Assignment 11 Draft 8 – opening
sequence
Luara Pires
Kauana Labaldi
Chantelle Gilkes

2. Results for draft #4
Teacher Assessment. Peer Assessment. Self Assessment.

3. www on draft #4
Titles are now in a good location and clear Extreme close ups are now being used.
Close up of her leg crossing. Effect for flashback is now better ‘Beach bypass’

4. Ebi for draft #5
Show what he was looking at. Show what he is writting.
A more closer shot of when she is going to More close ups for the flashback.
remember one of the flashbacks.

5. Things to do for final draft
• More close ups and extreme close ups
• Improve on voice over
• Improve on investigation papers
• Make it shorter
• Make the flashbacks shorter and more
affective