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Examples of a unified
paragraph
Example 1

 • (1)Generally, language has three functions
   according to its purpose: informative,
   expressive and directive. (2)Speaking with
   the purpose of communicating factual
   information is called the informative
   function. (3)Speaking in order to express
   feelings and attitudes of the listener is
   called the expressive to emotive function.
   (4)And finally, speaking in order to make
   other people act is called the directive
   function.
Comment

 • Here, the writer states the main idea in the
   first sentence (topic sentence). Sentence
   2, 3 and 4 are supporting sentences
   explaining or giving more information
   about sentence 1. All sentences in this
   paragraph are related to the topic
   sentence of the paragraph. So this
   paragraph as a whole has a unified and
   logical structure that follows a clear pattern
   of paragraph development.
Example 2

 • (1)My father is very strict with his children,
   especially me. (2)He will not let me out of
   the house unless I have done my
   homework. (3)Frankly speaking, I do not
   care whether I go to school or not.
   (4)School is such a waste of time. (5)My
   mother does not agree with my father.
   (6)They quarrel a lot. (7)Sometimes I wish
   they would get a divorce, but then whom
   would I live with?
Comment

 • The paragraph above lacks unity because
   it jumps from idea to idea. In the first
   sentence, the writer tells the reader about
   his father's strictness. This sentence is
   supported by sentence(2). Sentence (3)
   concerns the writer: he doesn't care
   whether he goes to school or not, which is
   supported by sentence (4). Another idea is
   stated in sentence (5) and supported by
   sentence (6) and (7).
Example 3


 • (1)There were several reasons for the destruction
   of the English religious houses. (2)Moral, political
   and financial considerations forced Henry to evict
   the monks. (3)When he did that, the people
   rebelled and organized pilgrims' groups to save
   the monasteries. (4)Their efforts failed, and many
   religious houses were sold or dismantled.
   (5)Beautiful churches were destroyed. (6)Many
   great medieval manuscripts were lost forever.
Comment

 • In the above paragraph, sentences (1) and
   (2) suggest that the writer is going to tell
   the readers the reasons for destroying the
   English monasteries. Instead of discussing
   the reasons why the English monasteries
   were destroyed, the writer jumps into a
   description of the people's reaction to
   Henry's action (sentence 3) and the
   consequences of that reaction (sentence
   4, 5 and 6). These sentences don't contain
   ideas relevant to the topic sentence at all.
Example 4

 •   If the writer had concentrated on the central idea in the
     opening sentence and had kept focus on that idea, the
     paragraph could be expanded as follows, and it would
     become a unified paragraph.
 •   (1)There are several reasons for the destruction of the
     English religious houses. (2)The official reason given by
     king Henry was morality: the monks, he claimed, were
     acting immorally by accumulating wealth at the expense of
     the poor. (3)However, there were political reasons as well.
     (4)Thomas Cromwell, the new vicar-general, was opposed
     to pilgrimages, and the worship of relics, and Henry didn't'
     wish to see his new government split into factions. (5)But
     the chief reason for the action was financial. (6)The
     resources of the crown were no longer sufficient to meet the
     cost of government and the expenses of Henry's overseas
     campaigns.
Comment

 • The above paragraph is unified
   because all major supporting
   sentences 2, 3 and 5 are relevant
   and related to the topic sentence (the
   firs sentence). Sentences 4 and 6 are
   minor supporting sentences which
   give additional details to sentences 3
   and 5 respectively.

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Example of a unified paragraph

  • 1. Examples of a unified paragraph
  • 2. Example 1 • (1)Generally, language has three functions according to its purpose: informative, expressive and directive. (2)Speaking with the purpose of communicating factual information is called the informative function. (3)Speaking in order to express feelings and attitudes of the listener is called the expressive to emotive function. (4)And finally, speaking in order to make other people act is called the directive function.
  • 3. Comment • Here, the writer states the main idea in the first sentence (topic sentence). Sentence 2, 3 and 4 are supporting sentences explaining or giving more information about sentence 1. All sentences in this paragraph are related to the topic sentence of the paragraph. So this paragraph as a whole has a unified and logical structure that follows a clear pattern of paragraph development.
  • 4. Example 2 • (1)My father is very strict with his children, especially me. (2)He will not let me out of the house unless I have done my homework. (3)Frankly speaking, I do not care whether I go to school or not. (4)School is such a waste of time. (5)My mother does not agree with my father. (6)They quarrel a lot. (7)Sometimes I wish they would get a divorce, but then whom would I live with?
  • 5. Comment • The paragraph above lacks unity because it jumps from idea to idea. In the first sentence, the writer tells the reader about his father's strictness. This sentence is supported by sentence(2). Sentence (3) concerns the writer: he doesn't care whether he goes to school or not, which is supported by sentence (4). Another idea is stated in sentence (5) and supported by sentence (6) and (7).
  • 6. Example 3 • (1)There were several reasons for the destruction of the English religious houses. (2)Moral, political and financial considerations forced Henry to evict the monks. (3)When he did that, the people rebelled and organized pilgrims' groups to save the monasteries. (4)Their efforts failed, and many religious houses were sold or dismantled. (5)Beautiful churches were destroyed. (6)Many great medieval manuscripts were lost forever.
  • 7. Comment • In the above paragraph, sentences (1) and (2) suggest that the writer is going to tell the readers the reasons for destroying the English monasteries. Instead of discussing the reasons why the English monasteries were destroyed, the writer jumps into a description of the people's reaction to Henry's action (sentence 3) and the consequences of that reaction (sentence 4, 5 and 6). These sentences don't contain ideas relevant to the topic sentence at all.
  • 8. Example 4 • If the writer had concentrated on the central idea in the opening sentence and had kept focus on that idea, the paragraph could be expanded as follows, and it would become a unified paragraph. • (1)There are several reasons for the destruction of the English religious houses. (2)The official reason given by king Henry was morality: the monks, he claimed, were acting immorally by accumulating wealth at the expense of the poor. (3)However, there were political reasons as well. (4)Thomas Cromwell, the new vicar-general, was opposed to pilgrimages, and the worship of relics, and Henry didn't' wish to see his new government split into factions. (5)But the chief reason for the action was financial. (6)The resources of the crown were no longer sufficient to meet the cost of government and the expenses of Henry's overseas campaigns.
  • 9. Comment • The above paragraph is unified because all major supporting sentences 2, 3 and 5 are relevant and related to the topic sentence (the firs sentence). Sentences 4 and 6 are minor supporting sentences which give additional details to sentences 3 and 5 respectively.