1. DO NOW
Take out poem plan homework
Entry Task
• What does “critique” mean?
• What does “incorporate feedback”
mean?
• What will you being doing today?
2. A Long Walk to Water
Learning Objectives
I can critique my partner’s two voice poem
using the rubric.
I can revise my work by incorporating
feedback from my partner.
3. A Long Walk to Water
Poetry Writing
Picking a partner – someone you trust!
Peer Critique Expectations
• Be kind
• Be specific
• Be helpful
• Participate
4. A Long Walk to Water
Poetry Writing
Today, only look at evidence
Peer Critique Directions
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Together: review the rubric - Command of
Evidence row
Together: read one poem aloud
Partner: give feedback
Author:
record feedback
Author:
Thanks you…my next step…
Switch & do it again!
5. Poetry Writing
Rubric
CRITERIA
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Command of
Evidence
Develop the
topic with
relevant, wellchosen facts,
definitions,
concrete details,
quotations, or
other info. and
examples from
the text(s).
Develop the
topic with
relevant facts,
definitions,
details,
quotations or
other
information and
examples from
the text(s).
Partially
develop the
topic of the
essay with the
use of some
textual
evidence, some
of which may
be irrelevant.
The main idea
of the poem
and the
comparison of
Salva and Nya
are developed
with wellchosen and
concrete
evidence and
quote from the
texts..
The main idea
of the poem
and the
comparison of
Salva and Nya
are developed
with relevant
evidence and
quotes from
the texts.
*Row 2*
Some
evidence and
quotes from
the texts help
compare
Salva and Nya
and partially
develop the
main idea of
the poem.
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Demonstrate
an attempt to
use evidence,
but only
develop ideas
with minimal,
occasional
evidence
which is
generally
invalid or
irrelevant.
There is an
attempt to
use evidence
and quotes
from the
texts, but
they are
generally
invalid or
irrelevant.
0
Provide no
evidence or
provide evidence
that is completely
irrelevant.
There are no
quotes or
evidence from
the texts or
they are
completely
irrelevant to
the topic of the
poem.
6. A Long Walk to Water
Poetry Writing
Revising your poem
Read over your Recording Form
Decide where you will add a revision
Write it in the space above the line you
want to change
Re-read it with the change to be sure it
makes sense
7. A Long Walk to Water
Poetry Writing
Shoulder partner
• Talk about your partnering today
• What was helpful?
• Is your poem better now?
8. A Long Walk to Water
Learning Objectives
I can critique my partner’s two voice poem
using the rubric.
I can revise my work by incorporating
feedback from my partner.
9. A Long Walk to Water
Homework
Test tomorrow?!
• Compare and contrast the website “Water
for Sudan” with A Long Walk to Water
• Finish any revisions to your poem