2. AGENDA
Review
Intro, thesis, body paragraphs,
counterargument
New
Conclusions
Discussion: Essay: Finishing the draft
GPU:
Integrating Quotations
Works Cited page
MLA format
3. Remember that a strong thesis statement should be clear, arguable, and appropriately qualified. Readers
expect to encounter a definitive judgment, not a vague, wishy-washy, or undecided judgment.
Establish the criteria upon which you will judge the film. Choose at least four, but you might explore
several more to make sure you have chosen the best options to support your opinion. Make sure your
topic sentences lead directly back to your thesis statement. Check to see that you have two, clear and
concrete examples that support each of your four topic sentences.
The Beginning: How can I capture readers’ attention from the start? Should I begin by naming the
director and starring actors? Should I open with a simple summary that leads to the thesis? Should I
use multiple paragraphs?
The Counterargument: Have you identified at least one likely objection or alternative judgement?
Have you responded by conceding or refuting the objection/alternative?
Review
4. Writing your Conclusion
To start, carefully read
the conclusion you wrote
for your in-class essay.
How can you make it
better?
5. Example from “Star Trek or Star Wreck”
Star Trek Into Darkness is a typical Hollywood
blockbuster, which exploits a popular franchise.
Unlike the original, it has little to offer to its
audience, except another portion of amazing
visual effects and the performance of Benedict
Cumberbatch. Considering all this, I would
recommend viewers to watch the new Star Trek
in company, with a huge bucket of popcorn, and
only once—in the cinema.
6. Qualities of Conclusions
A conclusion should
• stress the importance of the thesis statement
• give the essay a sense of completeness
• leave a final impression on the reader.
1. Create a new meaning: demonstrating how your ideas work together can create
a new picture. Often the sum of the paper is worth more than its parts.
2. Answer the question "So What?”: Show your readers why this paper was
important.
3. Propose a course of action, a solution to an issue, or questions for further
study: Redirect your reader's thought process and help him or her to apply your
info and ideas to her own life or to see the broader implications.
7. Create a new meaning:
Make a recommendation
Demonstrating how your ideas work together
can create a new picture. Often the sum of the
paper is worth more than its parts.
Given the outstanding performances of the child actors
and the realistic special effects, I must recommend this
film to children and adults alike.
8. Answer the question "So What?”
Show your readers why your essay is important.
Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone delivers a storyline
that makes the viewer think about the marginalization of
minority groups, so even though it is a film made in 2001, we
can clearly benefit from it today. Given the strength of that
message, I say see the film with your kids or other family
members. Talk about. Learn from it.
9. Propose a course of action
Redirect your reader's thoughts. Help him or her understand
the broader implications of your judgement. What would make
the film better?
While this film could have been a blockbuster based on the storyline,
the use of inexperienced child actors and the phony special effects
really make it, at best, a mediocre film for pre-teens and kids. A
recasting of the roles for a future version of this film, using
experienced child stars, and some advanced CGI will make it much
more exciting and believable.
10. 1.Combine your conclusion answers: If both prompts stir
you to answer, consider how you can combine the two for a
longer conclusion.
Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone delivers a storyline that makes
the viewer think about the marginalization of minority groups, so even
though it is a film made in 2001, we can clearly benefit from it today..
Given the strength of that message, I say see the film with your kids or
other family members. Talk about. Learn from it. But this film is not just
a message about how to treat people; the outstanding performances of
the child actors and the realistic special effects, make this film fun for
children and adults alike.
11. Take turns reading your
conclusion to someone
In your house
I’ll read first!
13. GPU: Integrating Quotations
1. Every time you paraphrase, summarize, or directly quote a
source (in this case the film), you must identify the material
as quoted.
2. For quotations that refer to one character and are under four
lines of text, we can use ”quotation marks."
3. Always introduce the scene or character who is speaking.
For example, you might write, When Harry and the Dursleys
return home from the zoo, Uncle Vernon throws Harry
against the wall and barks “What happened?” (Harry Potter
and the Sorcerer’s Stone).
4. We must include the name of the source to which we refer.
The citation will come between the last quotation mark and
the period.
14. One day, Hogwarts school tries to contact Harry by owl. Everyone is at the table but
Harry, and he is fetching the mail. This conversation shows how the Dursleys react:
DUDLEY. Dad, look! Harry's got a letter!!
HARRY. Hey, give it back! It's mine!
VERNON. Yours? Who'd be writing to you? (Harry Potter)((Harry Potter).
When Uncle Vernon finds out who is writing to Harry, he nails the mailbox slot
closed. This shows how mean the Dursleys are to Harry. They do not want Harry to
know that he is a wizard.
If you quote multiple speakers, you must use a different format. Begin each
line with the appropriate character’s name indented 1-inch (10 spaces) from
the left margin and written in all capital letters followed by a period. Here is
an example:
We will not use quotation marks or italicize the quote in the case
of multiple speakers; the indentation will be indication enough.
17. Margins and Formatting
1” all around
Go to “Layout” and adjust
margins or use custom
settings
Times New Roman 12
Indent body paragraphs ½
inch from the margin
Header: Last Name 1
Double Click in Header
Area
Type your last name
Align right
Go to “insert” and click on
“page number”
18. Heading: Double Spaced
Your Name
Dr. Kim Palmore
EWRT 1A
22 February 2019
Title
Original Title (not the title
of the film we saw)
No italics, bold, underline,
or quotation marks
Centered on the page
No extra spaces (just
double spaced after your
heading and before the
body of your text)
21. Basic Rules: Works Cited
Begin your Works Cited page on a separate page at the
end of your paper. It should have the same one-inch
margins and last name, page number header as the rest
of your paper.
Label the page Works Cited (do not italicize the words
Works Cited or put them in quotation marks) and center
the words Works Cited at the top of the page.
Double space all citations, but do not skip spaces
between entries.
Indent the second and subsequent lines of citations by
0.5 inches to create a hanging indent.
23. Homework!
Read HP Chapter 14
HW Discussion 11: Post your conclusion
Finish your draft
Bring two copies of your entire draft to our next
meeting. Minimum requirements: Intro, thesis, four
body paragraphs citing four different evaluation
criteria, a counter argument, and conclusion. This
should be at least three complete pages plus a works
cited page.
