2. Draft 1 Draft 2 Draft 3
Incorrect Need a wider variety We added more
understanding of of conventions conventions such as
conventions archival footage,
voiceover’s
Too much archival Not enough variety of More of our own
footage archival footages footage than archival
footage
Presenter shown too Presenter shown too Presenter outfit
little much changed to look more
youthful, and
presenter shown
enough and used for
voice overs over
archival footage and
statistics.
No use of statistics/ Statistics used and Creative statistics and
facts wide range of experts wide range of public
and expert opinions
Location did not relate Location was set only Location suited the
to topic in a park topic estate, street, and
trafagular square
Only looked into the Did not develop any Used a wide effective
news as a media further range of media
platform platforms; youtube,
newspapers exc.
3. We used to much archival footage and not enough
of our own footage, we showed no statistics so the
audience were not informed on the facts of our
documentary, only opinions from experts. Our
audience did not gain a broad knowledge of our
topic
4. We made statistics in many different styles, so
our creativity improved. We not only
interviewed experts but a variety of all ages
from the public which gave the audience a
wide range of perspectives on youth. We used
previously to show that this was not a one off
documentary.
5. We used garage band to create our background
music and to record voiceovers of our presenter.
Our presenter was shown in a variety of shots as
well as being shown on camera and being used as
a voiceover, as before in our other drafts the
presenter was either shown too much or too little.
By this draft we used previously and after the
break which made our documentary more
effective and informative.