3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
The colours used to represent the rabbit.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I’d add more detail to the rabbit
12. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
The people used for these pictures portrayed
the correct emotions well and gave a good feel
to them
What would you improve if you did it again?
Try to do different expressions
14. Evaluation
What did you like about your image? It’s
creative just as you would typically see in a
children’s book. It is weird, different, cool.
What would you improve if you did it again?
Try adding additional things to it. i.e Arms, legs,
ears etc.
20. Proposal
Dimensions
Initial amount of pages: 8-12 Dimensions: 25 x 1.3 x 25 cm
Story Overview
The son of the leader of the Japanese clan/village is left on his own as the next elder to
look after his people while the men travel off to war. He carries out various duties for
the elderly and runs errands for others and becomes a dependant boy, just like his
father. A few jobs he runs throughout the story consist of: collecting water for the
elderly hat is far away, he helps construct a stable for the horses, he helps fend off
some of the attacking wolves trying to get onto the farms, makes a bridge for his
friends.
Export Format
PDF, JPG
Advantages: Higher quality, directly onto blog, exports from photoshop
Disadvantages: Big files, slower, may not fit
21. Deadline
15th May
Audience
The main target audience for my story is older kids. This would be around the ages
of 9-10. Generally a male audience but can be read/read to and enjoyed by both
genders. It would be wide spread across everywhere in the world to be read, but
may appeal to the Asian, Japanese cultures as that’s where it is set. For me, class
wouldn’t be an issue so that hasn’t been set.
Production Methods
Using Shapes and/or Rotoscope would be ideal to produce my story book. Basing
this off researching kids story books/tales/myths, standard, typical story books
often utilise shapes to often portray characters. The reason I want to use them is
because some complex features of my ideas would be flexible to dim down and do
much more easily.
22. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
There is a clear explanation what is going to
happen within the book and there is a clear a
overview of what your story is about.
There I also a good explanation of the audience
this books is being aimed at.
Even though there is some information about the
story in there I still think it could have a little more
information added to it, such as what some of the
errands he has to run are and what his duties might
be.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
It has a lot of good detail on the setting of the book
and the art style that could possibly be used.
There is a good use pictures showing in what era
this is set and what style of village it is in.
There could be some parts on the types of fonts
that are going to be used for he text and it would
help to get some more images showing what the
characters may possibly look like.
23. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
I think you have a clear idea of what you want to
do, and how you want to do it. You have shown
good examples of how you want to create the book
as well showing how you are going to make the
graphics.
I think it needs more work with the storyline and
explain what happens a bit more, go into a little
more detail with it. Also just explain how you are
going to create the effects a bit more in the
methods section.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Again I think you have a clear strong idea of what
you want to do with your book, this means you can
get a better feel for the book and make it exactly
how you want it if you know your idea well.
Well done
I would of liked to see some more pictures and to
have seen different ideas that you have had before
this, I also think you could have shown what
different fonts you are planning on using for your
book cover and the inner text.
24. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
There is a clear explanation to how you will create
the illustrations for your book, which has been
thought about in detail with reasons behind your
thoughts.
The target audience for your book has been
thought about in detail which will be useful for
creating your final book as you will have a rough
idea of what your audience would want to see in a
book.
You could go into more depth with the story outline
mentioning some of the errands that the main
character has to do, so that when it comes to
making the book you will have a better
understanding about what key aspects you need to
put across into illustrations so the younger readers
can follow the story.
You could also mention the sizes of the pages or
the book in your dimensions section so we can get
a better understanding of what the book will look
like.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Contains a lot of images of the setting and theme of
your book, you have a clear understanding about
the style you are wanting to put across to the
reader.
You have a clear understanding of the era that you
are wanting to put across to the reader, which could
interest the reader in your book as it is unique,
make sure this comes across in your final design
for your book.
You could create a more general mind map which
shows the different styles and stories of existing
children’s books you have looked at and write about
what ideas you feel you could incorporate into your
book and what stories you looked at before you
decided on your final idea.
There could be more mind maps added so we can
get a better understanding of the characters within
the story and what they look like as well as what
styles of fonts you are wanting to use for the final
book, with examples.
25. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
My feedback was positive, but had some creative and understandable comments which
would allow me to improve my work basis.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree with all the feedback on slides 22, 23, 24 on what could be improved on both the
proposal and my idea generations.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I don’t disagree with any of my feedback as it’s all things I know that I could improve on
in he future.
26. Story Outline
• Leader of the village prepares to leave for war
• Speaks to son that he’s left in charge to help
• Leader leaves the village, last goodbyes
• Son ventures through the village seeing what he can do
• Old lady asks him to help farm her crops for her
• Collects in the fresh crops for he village.
• After that Job, a keeper asks for him to help build a stable for more horses.
• He builds the stable.
• The next job is to help forage for some food for his mother, so he collects
some fruit.
• He ventures back to the village, exhausted but feeling good.
• Arrives back into the village to his house where the village are awaiting his
arrival to surprise him.
• Comes back to the house, everyone thanks him and he feels good. They
reward him with his own custom made armour
27.
28.
29. Original Script
http://www.worldoftales.com/Asian_folktales/Japanese_folktale_29.html
Long, long ago there lived in Kyoto a brave soldier named Kintoki. Now he fell in love with a
beautiful lady and married her. Not long after this, through the malice of some of his friends, he fell
into disgrace at Court and was dismissed. This misfortune so preyed upon his mind that he did not
long survive his dismissal—he died, leaving behind him his beautiful young wife to face the world
alone. Fearing her husband's enemies, she fled to the Ashigara Mountains as soon as her husband
was dead, and there in the lonely forests where no one ever came except woodcutters, a little boy
was born to her. She called him Kintaro or the Golden Boy. Now the remarkable thing about this
child was his great strength, and as he grew older he grew stronger and stronger, so that by the
time he was eight years of age he was able to cut down trees as quickly as the woodcutters. Then
his mother gave him a large ax, and he used to go out in the forest and help the woodcutters, who
called him "Wonder-child," and his mother the "Old Nurse of the Mountains," for they did not
know her high rank. Another favorite pastime of Kintaro's was to smash up rocks and stones. You
can imagine how strong he was!Quite unlike other boys, Kintaro, grew up all alone in the mountain
wilds, and as he had no companions he made friends with all the animals and learned to
understand them and to speak their strange talk. By degrees they all grew quite tame and looked
upon Kintaro as their master, and he used them as his servants and messengers. But his special
retainers were the bear, the deer, the monkey and the hare.The bear often brought her cubs for
Kintaro to romp with, and when she came to take them home Kintaro would get on her back and
have a ride to her cave. He was very fond of the deer too, and would often put his arms round the
creature's neck to show that its long horns did not frighten him. Great was the fun they all had
together.One day, as usual, Kintaro went up into the mountains, followed by the bear, the deer, the
monkey, and the hare. After walking for some time up hill and down dale and over rough roads,
they suddenly came out upon a wide and grassy plain covered with pretty wild flowers.Here,
indeed, was a nice place where they could all have a good romp together. The deer rubbed his
30. Final Script
• There once was a village in Japan. It went to war with the bad guys.
• The leader of the village had to leave, so he spoke to his son to tell him he was in charge while he
was gone.
• The son accepted his role. His dad left.
• The boy went out to see the village and how he could help.
• The only lady famer asked if he would help her farm her crops, so he did.
• Once the boy collected the crops, he carried on going through the village.
• The boy stumbled upon the keeper. He needed a new stable to be built so he asked if the boy
would help.
• They finished the stable.
• He returns home to his mother that then tells him he needs to collect some food for later on.
• The boy goes out to get some fresh fruit and berries later.
• When the boy returns back to the village and back home, there is a surprise for him.
• The whole village is here and the thank him for his work and rewarded him for his work. They
presented him with his very own armour. His mother was so proud and reminded her how much he
was like his amazing father.
