1. Name : Melvin Lim Wei Jien
Student ID : 0315772
IC No. : 950814-10-5493
Subject : English 01
Lecturer : Ms. Thrivlojana Perinpasingam

2. Pre-Writing (Listing)
Causes : 1) Parental pressure
2) Heavy education system
3) Competition to success
4) Wants to just get the degree certificate
5) Worried about the future
Effects : 1) Anti-social may happen
2) Suicidal, Commit Suicide
3) Gets angry easily
4) Frustrated easily
5) Not enough rest

3. In most countries youngsters are lack of free time for their leisure activities and
they are normally busy studying because of their education authorities/teachers,
parents, relatives and some other close peoples. Some of the major causes of this
condition and some effects are included in this essay. Everybody agrees that the key to
success lies under hard work. Thus, everyone wants to study hard and be successful
and happy. However, this may lead to having very little leisure time and under a heavy
pressure because of studying hard. What are the causes and effects of this problem?
Firstly, many countries tend to have a very heavy education system. In such a
country, people have to spend many hours at school every day, some even had no
choice but to sleepover. After coming back from school, they will have tons of
homeworks and assignments that are supposed to be handed in the day after that or in
the same week. Obviously, they are left with very few choices except to do and to study
hard. If not, unfinished work will cause them to get low makes or even 0% marks.
The competition for success and making sure they succeed in future is also the
main cause for young people, which makes them wants to concentrate only on their
school or college performance and making sure they get good results in the end. In
other words, without a right attitude, a person could enforce himself to study just to have
certificates. Young people also studies hard because they believe if they get a good
result, they will have a brighter future.
In addition, parental pressure is one of the other causes and it also leads the
situation to look worse. For example, as soon as a student arrives home from school, he
is restricted by his parents, who make him or her do homework. Therefore, both

4. education authorities and parents have implausible influence on the young people.
Young people have no choice but to listen to both education authorities and parents in
order to not disappoint them by getting low grades and unfinished work, and this causes
them to study harder and have additional pressure to their life.
One of the effects is anti-social. Consequently, young people are putting more of
their time in studying rather than socializing with friends and family. They tend to rather
stay at home and rush their highly amount of projects or homeworks given by the
teachers than going out and relax with their friends. This makes them becomes very
anti-social and hard to socialize if they need to. For example, if they need to present
something or speaking in public, it might be a very big problem to them.
Another effects of this is that youngsters tend to get angry and frustrated easily
because of the pressure they are under. They are under so much pressure because of
the tons of homeworks and project they get from school and that if anyone accidentally
annoys or disturbs them, they can’t be calm down easily and they’ll start to rage. They
get angry so easily because they started to compiled their anger and hate towards the
homeworks since day one and that they will just rage out if they feel like they are being
annoyed by a person or something. Besides that, they will also not have enough rest
because of having to much pressure, they tend to not sleep easily in the night because
they are frustrated about the next day.
One of the main and common effects in some countries is commit suicides.
Youngsters think that the easiest way to quit having so much pressure is to quit life, in
other words, commit suicide and die. They quit life so easy because of the pressure that

5. the parents and education authorities gave are just too much to handle. Youngsters
can’t think maturely and properly because they get so much pressure and for them the
best way is to commit suicide.
In conclusion, studying should be a good and fun thing to do, but having too
much work giving by the teachers may cause a huge pressure to the young people.
Also, especially when parents nowadays wants their childrens to get good grades and
have a bright future. In my opinion, education authorities and parents should also have
a thought that giving too much work and pressure is not too good, they should try to fit
in young people shoes and think for themselves. They shouldn’t make studying such a
difficult and pressurize thing to do.

6. Refrences
1) (Study Horror) (IELTS Writing Sample Study Pressure For Young People)
(Available at : http://ielts.studyhorror.com/writings/IELTS-Writing-Task-2-Study-
Pressure-For-Young-People/12) [Accessed 29th May 2013]
2) (Essay Forum) (2011) (In some countries young people have little leisure time
and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies.) (Available at :
http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/some-countries-youth-have-little-
leisure-time-under-lot-28230/ ) [Accessed 29th May 2013)]
3) (Cause and effect essay) (2004) (Available at :
http://www.buowl.boun.edu.tr/students/types%20of%20essays/Cause%20and%2
0effect%20Essay.htm) [Accessed 29th May 2013]