This is a rough draft, I need it to be fixed to turn in as final. I need this essay to include info from the collections I will be postin. It includes points from collection 1-3. It needs to include 1-12, which my profesor pointed out to me. I will also be posting the commentaries made by my proffesor on what needs to be done to improve the essay. I am sending writings and stories which must be used to write the paper. I have highlighted key points that I made anotations on.  The topic of the essay will be on How are morality, ethics, faith and religion intertwined? (e.g. What does it mean to be good?). The essay has to be about 2500 words long, (ten typed, double spaced) but the rough drafts can be shorter. I wish for the writer to do both the drfts and the final essay to avoid confusion. These were the commentaries made by my pproffesor. Comments on Major Essay Draft: I didn't really have a problem with the lack of a personal approach in your draft (that seemed to trouble two of your evaluators slightly). To me, you were trying to be very systematic, much like the rest of your subgroup, trying to extract every possible connection across the four concepts.  The final version will likely have a little less abstract set-up, now that you know your direction, and will likely have more application to specific texts on the syllabus, including a few from collections 4-12, not just 1-3. .

1. This is a rough draft, I need it to be fixed to turn in as final. I
need this essay to include info from the collections I will be
postin. It includes points from collection 1-3. It needs to
include 1-12, which my profesor pointed out to me. I will
also be posting the commentaries made by my proffesor on what
needs to be done to improve the essay. I am sending writings
and stories which must be used to write the paper. I have
highlighted key points that I made anotations on.
The topic of the essay will be on How are morality, ethics, faith
and religion intertwined?
(e.g. What does it mean to be good?). The essay has to be about
2500 words long, (ten typed, double spaced) but the rough
drafts can be shorter. I wish for the writer to do both the drfts
and the final essay to avoid confusion.
These were the commentaries made by my pproffesor.
Comments on Major Essay Draft: I didn't really have a problem
with the lack of a personal approach in your draft (that seemed
to trouble two of your evaluators slightly). To me, you were
trying to be very systematic, much like the rest of your
subgroup, trying to extract every possible connection across the
four concepts. The final version will likely have a little less
abstract set-up, now that you know your direction, and will
likely have more application to specific texts on the syllabus,
including a few from collections 4-12, not just 1-3.