3. Preparation for Peer Review
1. Everyone should have two hard (paper)
copies of his or her draft. Please get
them out.
2. If you don’t have two copies of your
essay, please go and make them. If you
don’t have your essay finished, please
see me after we get started.
3. Everyone will receive a copy of the peer
review worksheet.
4. 1. Your MLA formatted header and heading
2. Your original title
3. Your introduction to the essay
4. Your thesis.
5. Two properly integrated and cited quotation, formatted
in MLA style.
6. Your counterargument
7. Your conclusion
8. At the end of your essay, ask one question you have
about your draft.
Mark the following parts of one copy of your essay, using
brackets to designate the beginning and ending of each
section:
6. This session is geared toward revision—not editing. While you may
circle errors you notice in the text, refrain from making editing
suggestions, that is spelling, grammar, and word choice suggestions.
Your job as a reader is to answer the questions on the handout.These
questions will help you help the writer to improve the paper in terms
of organization, content, integrating quotations, and MLA style.
If you don’t know the answer to a question, ask me. I will be happy to
help you.
This is not an editing exercise;
it is a revision process.
7. Follow the directions on the handout. Respond to each
six parts carefully and completely.
A good critical reading does three things: It lets the writer know how the reader
understands the point of the story, praises what works best, and indicates where
the draft could be improved.
1. Evaluate how well the subject is presented.
Summarize:Tell the writer what you understand from reading the introduction:
the plot?Who directed or acted in it? How much money it made?The genre or
style?
Praise: Point to the place where the film is introduced the most effectively — for
example, where it is described vividly and accurately, where it is named, or
where it is clearly placed in a recognizable genre or category.
Critique:Tell the writer where readers might need more information about the
film, the genre, the director, or the actors. Note whether any information about
it seems inaccurate or possibly only partly true. Suggest how the writer could
clarify the introduction.
9. The Process
• Exchange papers so that your partner can follow along as
you read.
• Each person will read his or her own essay aloud.
EVERYONE SHOULD FINISH READING BEFORE
ANYONE BEGINS RESPONDING.
• Readers will follow along as the writer presents his or her
work; readers may circle obvious errors.
• If you cannot decide reading order, the youngest reads
first.
10. When you are done thoroughly
responding to the revision
questions.
1. Bring the paper and your notes to me
so I can record your work.
2. Return the paper and your notes to
the author.
3. Work on your own paper until we end
the writing workshop.
4. When you are both finished, you may
ask and answer questions together.
11. Go here to see the
rest of this paper.
The link is under
your Class 8
homework.
https://owl.english.p
urdue.edu/owl/resou
rce/747/13/
12. One day, Hogwarts school tries to contact Harry by owl. Everyone is at
the table but Harry, and he is fetching the mail. This conversation shows
how the Dursleys react:
DUDLEY. Dad, look! Harry's got a letter!!
HARRY. Hey, give it back! It's mine!
VERNON. Yours? Who'd be writing to you? (Harry
Potter)((Harry Potter).
When Uncle Vernon finds out who is writing to Harry, he nails the
mailbox slot closed. This shows how mean the Dursleys are to Harry.
They do not want Harry to know that he is a wizard.
If you quote multiple speakers, you must use a different format. Begin
each line with the appropriate character’s name indented 1-inch (10
spaces) from the left margin and written in all capital letters followed by
a period. Here is an example:
We will not use quotation marks or italicize the quote in the
case of multiple speakers; the indentation will be indication
enough.
14. Correcting Run-ons by Building
Compound Sentences
A compound sentence is made up of two or more simple sentences
joined by one of the following:
A comma and a coordinating conjunction
I like to study grammar, and I love this class.
A semicolon
I like to study grammar; I love this class.
A semicolon and an adverbial conjunction
I like to study grammar; therefore, I love this class.
Check your paper now to make sure that you have joined your sentences
correctly. Find a run-on sentence to correct, or find a compound sentence
you have correctly punctuated. Show me either one
15. A fragment is either an incomplete sentence, lacking a complete subject or
predicate, or a dependent clause punctuated as a sentence. Even though
a fragment begins with a capital letter and ends with a period, it cannot
stand alone as a sentence.
FRAGMENT Tonight it’s my turn. A ride-along with Sergeant Rob Nether of
the Green Valley Police Department.
Because a fragment can often be edited in several ways, begin by
considering what the fragment lacks and how its ideas relate to those in
the sentences before and after it. Then use one of the following strategies
to change the fragment into a complete sentence. To edit the fragment in
the example, the writer might connect it to the preceding sentence.
for a
Tonight it’s my turn. A ride-along with Sergeant Rob Nether of the GreenValley
Police Department
Sentence Fragments
16. Ways to Correct a Fragment
Check your
essay for
sentence
fragments, and
work to
eliminate
them!
17. Capitalization StrategiesThat Will Help
You inThis Essay
• CapitalizeTitles:
• Capitalize the first word of the title and of any subtitle.
• Capitalize all major words (nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, and
pronouns) in the title, including the second part of hyphenated major
words (e.g., Self-Report not Self-report).
• Capitalize all words of four letters or more.
• Capitalize the first word of a document and the first word after a period.
• Capitalize “I.”
• Capitalize proper noun:
•Examples:
Rowling
Harry
Hogwarts School of Magic
• Do not capitalize occupations before full names.
•Example:
director Chris Columbus
Have I capitalized my
title correctly?Are my
proper nouns
capitalized?Are there
any other errors?
18. Spacing
• Double-space the entire essay:There are no extra
spaces anywhere in the text. Even the works cited
page is double-spaced.
• Write out the numbers one through nine; if you use
two numbers in the same sentence, and one of
them is larger than nine, the you write both as
numerals: I have 6 cats, but my sister has 12!
Numbers
Is my essay double-spaced all the way
through? Are my numbers written
correctly?
19. quotation marks, underlining, and
italics.
• Underlining and italics serve the same purpose. Never do
both. Do NOT use quotation marks, underline, or use italics
together.
• For any work that stands on its own, you should use italics
(underline if you are writing longhand). Stories or chapters
from within a book are considered PARTS of the book.
• A work that is part of a larger work goes in quotation
marks.
• Don’t put quotation marks around titles of your own
composition.
20. 1. Books
2. Plays
3. CDs/Albums
4. Magazines, Newspapers,
Journals
5. Poems (Long: Published
alone)
6. Television and Radio
Shows and Movies
1. ChapterTitles
2. Short Stories
3. SongTitles
4. Articles (from Magazines,
Newspapers, and Journal)
5. Poems: (Short: Published
in a collection).
6. Television and Radio
EpisodeTitles: Quotation
Marks
Italicize complete (whole)
volumes, issues, or
productions
Use quotation marks
for parts of the whole
Check your work for proper use of italics and quotation marks.
21. Submit your essay throughTurnitin
• Submit your essay as a
Microsoft Word doc or
docx format
• If you use Google
Drive, simply
download your
document as aWord
doc
1. Go to Canvas
2. Go to Week 4
3. Go to Class 8
4. Use the link titled: Revise essay #2 and submit
it through turnit-in
5. Scroll to the bottom of the assignment.
6. Click “Upload Submission” to upload your doc
or docx essay document.
Your essay is due before noon on Saturday!
22. Homework
• Essay #2 Due Saturday at noon
• Read HP Chapters 12-13 pages 205-
248
• Vocabulary: Vocab 4-9
• Revise: essay #2 and submit it
through turnit-in before the due
date.
• Read: Essay #3 prompt
