1. A scary story…
…by a scary group of students…
Nivel intermedio. Group B

2. The story begun like this:
“One day I was home alone and a parcel was left at my
door…”
This is what the students wrote…

3. “I was very scared because de black parcel
had a strange sound.”

4. “I was really scared because the
black parcel made a strange
sound…
Or (this is a suggestion) “I was really scared because a strange sound
came from that black parcel”

5. “I didn’t know if open it of not. Finaly I
decided opening it and I jumped at the
chain when I saw there was inside.”

6. “I didn’t know if I should open it or
not. Finally, I decided to open it and
I jumped on my chair when I saw
what was inside”

7. “Into of the parcel where was a clock with a
strange form and a strong noise…ring, rang…”

8. “Inside the parcel there was a
strangely shaped clock that made a
loud noise…tick, tock…”

9. “This clock marks the past and future
years. I couldn’t believe it. What did it
happen if I touched it?”

10. “The clock marked the past and
the future. I couldn’t believe it.
What would happen if I touched
it?”
Suggestion: I would insert something here like: “then I made a
shocking discovery: the clock…”

11. “During one hour the clock stopped and
I decided to call a police”

12. “After an hour, the clock stopped, and
I decided to call the police.”

13. “The police took a long time to came and
I didn’t know to do. Perhaps it was a
bomb. I decided to wait.”

14. “It took a long time for the police to
come, and I didn’t know what to do.
Perhaps it was a bomb!
I decided to wait.”

15. “but the clock moved again, the strong noise
got on my nerves and I was really scared, so
I called my neighbour because the police
didn’t come”

16. “But the clock started working
again. The loud noise got on my
nerves and I was really scared, so I
called my neighbour because the
police didn’t come” (suggestion “never came”)

17. “My neighbour wasn’t at home, and I
decided to come back at home. The street
was dark.”

18. “My neighbour wasn’t at home, so
I decided to go back home myself.
The street was dark.”
Suggestion: I couldn’t find my neighbour, so I decided to go back
home.”

19. “At last the police arrive my home. They
were more frightened than me. So the boys of
the group decided that they can’t caught the
parcel and they came back t0 the police
station and let me with the parcel. Alone,
without any helpness.”

20. “At last, the police arrived. They were
more frightened than me, so they
decided that they couldn’t catch the
parcel and they went back to the police
station. They left me alone with the
parcel. Alone and helpless.”

21. “Then the phone ran. My dog woke up and
came next the parcel, and started to smell it.
I told to it: ‘No, come in, don’t smell it, it
would be dangerous.”

22. “Then the phone rang. My dog woke
up, came next to the parcel and started
to sniff it. I told him: ‘no, come here,
don’t sniff it. It’s dangerous!”

23. “In that moment, my dog get crazy, an it
started to ….. More aunxiusly around me
while it was making big noise.”

24. “In that moment my dog got crazy,
and started to bark more anxiously
around me while a louder noise came
out of the parcel.”

25. “I was so nervous and shouted ‘Shut up!’ to
my dog. My dog was paralized looking
something behind me. Suddenly, I felt cold in
my back, and the parcel moved itself!
In that moment, I knew I was chosen to be
one of them. Don’t stay alone at home. I could
visit you.”

26. “I was so nervous that I shouted at my dog.
Shut up! He was paralized, looking at
something behind me. Suddenly, I felt
something cold on my back. And the parcel
moved! In that moment. I knew I had been
chosen to become one of them. Don’t stay
alone at home. I could visit you…”

27. This was the result.
Good job!!!
Happy Halloween!