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Slugline
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Characters in scene
Point of scene
Conflict
Ending / central
question
Scene description (without dialogue) focusing on key micro aspects (mise-
en-scène, camera, sound, editing, etc)

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Slugline Int. Flight Deck of the space freighter ‘Pole Star’. Day
Canton scrabbles desperately to reach the Failsafe lever as
Endpoint of last scene
the Gyroscope powers up, lighting the hull of the ship.
Characters in scene Hunt, Fischer, Cruise, Rodriguez
Point of scene To show that Hunt is a better flight commander than Fischer
Hunt’s desire to see Fischer fail set against the
Conflict
consequences for all of failure
Ending / central Hunt is forced to countermand Fischer to save the ship /
question Will they be able to escape before the oxygen fails?
Scene description (without dialogue) focusing on key micro aspects (mise-en-
scène, camera, sound, editing, performance)
Console lights flicker, illuminating Cruise. [Close up of console lights, pulling back to
reveal a low angle shot of Cruise illuminated by coloured lights]. He looks across to the
shadowed, leather Captain’s chair where Fischer sits crouched forward. A nearby sun
flares [Sound bridge – sound of flaring sun – linking shot of captain's chair on long shot
of sun]. The sunshields descend with a worn mechanical sound [Sound effects
accompanied by quiet music suggesting tension]. Fischer leaps and crouches to see
Canton, his colleague trying to save crew, as the shields descend [Close up of Fischer's
face showing anguished expression].
Bulkhead doors clang as Hunt and Rodriguez enter [Medium shot of Hunt and
Rodriguez. Slow zoom to close-up of Roriguez's face]. Rodriguez, sweat covered and
disheveled looks to Cruise. The lights turn red [pan to show medium shot of lights
turning to red]. A pulsating siren begins [Diegetic sound of siren]. Hunt runs to Fischer,
whose face is lit by the red light from the console [Low angle medium shot of Fischer,
expressionistic red light cast over face]. Hunt grabs his face and lifts his wildly flicking
eyes to hers, but he cannot look at her and he retreats into the shadow. Hunt turns and
barks instructions [Series of rapid cuts from Hunt to Fischer]. A moment of hesitation.
Cruise and Rodriguez look from a red-lit Hunt, to a silhouetted Fischer.
A distant rumbling explosion rocks the ship. They are thrown to the floor. The
Gyroscope camera activates [Cut from close-up of gyroscope camera to point of view
shot from gyroscope camera]. Rodriguez leans over a monitor, sweating [High angle of
Rodriguez looking down to gyroscope camera]. On screen an interference-strewn image
of Canton appears [Medium shot of gyroscope screen, with interference, showing figure
trapped]. Picking herself up, Hunt shouts a command, and Cruise hits a button. A
flashing light warns oxygen level is low [Close up of warning light.]. Another explosion
rocks the flight deck [Sound effects of explosion] and they are thrown into darkness.
Extracted in part from: Gaffney, F. (2007) On Screenwriting (Auteur