1. Kaya Sumbland Sanel Homer A
Rahel Fasil Gia Alveranga

2. A

3. Kaya Sumbland - D Record of Grade for draft 1
What Went Well: (Individual)
• Clear presentation and organisation
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Excellent structure
Good understanding B
Even Better If:
• More detail
• Use more images
• Take real pictures of characters
Targets to Improve:
• To explain my points in a PEE structure and use a verity of images.
Sanel Homer - U
What Went Well:
• Good organisation
• Nice diagrams
• Good understanding of chosen theme
Even Better If:
• Relate my pictures to the words
• Less text
• More detail
Targets to Improve:
• Make sure my diagrams are not to basic and shorted lengthy paragraphs into bullet points.

4. Record of Grade for draft 1 B
(Individual)
Gia Alveranga - U
No work handed in
Rahel Fasil - E
What Went Well-
• Short brief points
Even Better If-
• Use titles for slides
• Don’t talk about films I haven't watched
• Make sure I present my knowledge more clearly
Targets to Improve-
• Make sure I understand fully what enigma is and organise my slides better

5. Presentation Level – D- Record of Grade for draft 1
What went well? Group B
• Showing progress and achievement
• Slides have good organisation
• Good effort and creativity
• Good start to conventions
Even better if?
• Colour code should be background
• Title all the slides
• More contribution from Sanel, Rahel and Gia
• Don’t read from the screen
Targets to improve…
• To make sure all group members contribute
• Write our presentation with more detail and understanding
• To word our idea’s better

6. Kaya & Sanel
Decisions and Revisions C
Since our first draft, we’ve changed our idea a lot.
• Our first draft was a thriller on a girl
who had schizophrenia who thought
she was possessed. However, our
feedback told us to take out
schizophrenia as it was too
complicated and sent out the wrong
message about the mental illness.
• So, in our second draft we removed the mental
illness and make the character actually be
possessed by demons and spirits who kidnaps
innocent victims. Then again, our feedback told us
it was to complicated and too much. We were told
to either focus on possession or kidnap, or change
the genre. Also our locations were unreliable and
just not very flexible.

7. Kaya & Sanel
Decisions and Revisions C
Therefore, as a group we decided to
come up with a completely new idea.
Kaya, Sanel and Rahel all wrote their
own opening sequence and one got
picked to be the one we develop as it
suited our target audience and as a
group we felt it would be best in However, the ending of our new opening
connecting with them. So, we have sequence about drugs was confusing and
now changed to drama, starting all didn’t match, so, Kaya and Sanel met up as
our genre research from scratch. the others in our group couldn’t and
discussed and revised on many different
ways on ending it after thoroughly
researching the drug our character took.
Also making very interesting and
captivating for our audience.
Making these changes helped us greatly because we fully understand and we fully research the
things we’re doing, revised our locations thoroughly and its a lot less complicated than our
other drafts helping us explain it better to our target audience to receive the best feedback we
can.

8. Kaya & Sanel
D
Genre – Drama
• Our genre has changed because all of our thriller ideas were to
complicated for our audience and sent out the wrong message.
• However we changed to drama as we felt its more effective and
real for our target audience.
• We all agreed that doing a drama would be the best genre for us
because we understand the conventions and how we can relate it
to real life.
• Also it can hopefully send out a educational message.

9. Kaya Example of a Drama film
D
Bend It Like Beckham
2002
Bend it like Beckham is a drama
because it shows the real life of
Jesminder and her conflict with her
family because her dream is to be a
female footballer as they want her to
lead the normal life of an Indian
woman. She’s also a character many of
their target audience can relate to, also
at the end of the film her parents
come to realise that she's passionate
about football and lets her play with
her team.

10. Sanel
Example of a Drama film
D
Confession Of A Teenage Drama
Queen - 2004
This is a drama film because its based
on real life and how Lola is obsessed
with this celebrity called Stu and she is
determined to met him whether her
mum grounds her or not which can
relate to teenagers today and also
how being too obsessed and focusing
on the stars without realising how
important school work is.

11. Kaya & Sanel
D.a
Tensions
Climax
Characters we Relationships
can relate to Drama
Conventions
Conflict
Realisation
Emotions

12. Convention Use/Develop/ Purpose and Examples from
Drama Challenge Description films D.a
Tension Use – audience Purpose – to make the
follow a character audience fear for the Kidulthood
not knowing what is characters and to create
enigma
going to happen
Description – all the
Develop – audience characters are shown in
is given the the school playground.
impression that The camera isn’t
somebody is controlled and is filmed
watching them at Dutch angle which
conveys the impression
that they are being Boy in the playground
watched creating
texting on his phone.
tension.
Conflict Use – argument Teenage daughter Precious
between mother comes home after giving
and daughter birth to her daughter.
The mother is jealous
Challenge –
and angry as she has
escalates into an given birth to her
argument that has husband’s baby. She
quite graphic and becomes so angry that
extreme violence she throws a TV at her. Mother throws a TV down the
stairs at Precious