2. Introduction
First thoughts…
Audience - because they are the ones that are
going to read the story. If your story has
interesting parts to it, they will enjoy reading
your story.
Type of writing - RECOUNT Alliteration
How am I going to start my story? Fahren was frightened from the flaming fireworks
Language Resources
Which LR would be effective for my recount writing?
What do I need to know? 2 things:
1. I need to decide what I am writing about. Fireworks Show
2. What is the MAIN event/point that you want to talk about?
Onomatopoeia
BOOM! The noise deafened my ears! Simile
I ran as fast as a cheetah to get a
Hyperbole good seat for the fireworks show!
The noise from the exploding fireworks were so loud, I thought my ears were
going to burst!
3. Introduction
Fireworks Show
First thoughts…
Audience - because they are the ones that are
going to read the story. If your story has
interesting parts to it, they will enjoy reading
your story.
Type of writing - RECOUNT
I am stuck for ideas? I’m not sure if I have
enough information for the reader.
Use the question words to help you think about more information for the reader, without telling them
straight away.
where why
who -wharf how
-bank -fireworks show
-My friends and I -celebration -walked
-Te Kaha and I -get together -rode
-I -horse
what when
-Walking to the fireworks show -The crack of dawn
-Meeting their friends at the wharf -Early afternoon
-Late at night
4. Rising Action
Fireworks Show
• What next?
• What DID happen before the
• We need to BUILD UP to the main fireworks show?
event.
• Shadow’s thinking: Before the
• That means we are making it fireworks show, I wanted to know
exciting, and make the reader what my other friends were doing,
want to find out what happens so I rang them, and we met at the
next. wharf.
• We have to think about what • “We were all excited to light our
happened BEFORE our main event. big fireworks”
• Now make it exciting!
• How do we make that interesting?
• “I wonder what this one will do?”
• “I hope it’s not too loud!”
5. Rising Action
Fireworks Show
• Does my story make sense to begin
my MAIN EVENT now?
Shadow’s thinking: Before the fireworks As I lit my firecracker, I began to get too
show, I wanted to know what my other excited and I couldn’t run away.
friends were doing, so I rang them, and
Second Edit
we met at the wharf.
As I lit the huge firecracker, the excitement
“We were all excited to light our big rushed through my body, and I didn’t even
fireworks” notice I had ran back to the safety of my
uncle’s work truck.
Now make it exciting!
The sentence RIGHT BEFORE the main event.
“I hope it’s not too loud!”
I looked up and saw a big ball of fire.
I pulled out the biggest firecracker in the
box. Second Edit
“I wonder what this one will do?” I gazed upwards, watching the firecracker
trail up towards the night sky.
6. Main Event
Fireworks Show
My MAIN EVENT that I decided on my
planning sheet was “watching the fireworks
explode in the night sky”.
Irony
And the loud noise I expected was quite the opposite.
Which LR would be effective for my main event?
What do I need to know?
The different Language Resources I could use.
Which one suits my story?
Onomatopoeia
KABOOM! What an amazing burst of colours… Simile
The light lit the loud sky like livid
Hyperbole lightning bolts.
I felt like I was at the Sydney Olympics fireworks show!
7. Falling Action
Fireworks Show
Rounding up my main event.
What could we use to help us think about what we could write about?
See Taste
Feel We could use our
SENSES!
Hear
Smell
see taste
The size of the explosion made the sky seem I could taste the gunpowder
so close. in the air.
feel
The explosion was so hefty, it almost pushed me over.
hear
The noise filled my eardrums.
smell
The scent of the exploding fireworks pierced my
nostrils.
8. Future Statement
Fireworks Show
Thinking of my main event, and how it could be
BETTER/IMPROVED in the future?
What could we use to help us think about what we could write about?
Could I share it with someone next time?
How could it be better next time?
Why would I do it again?
What might make it better?
How did I feel about it?
Sentence Starters
I hope next time…
I felt… Are there any other ways of starting our
If it happens again… future sentence?
Hopefully…
Maybe …